"Fatty" or "Piggy"
Piggy's Journal:
I met Ralph on the beach and we introduced ourselves to each other. I told him what the boys at school called me. I told him they used to call me "Piggy". He started to laugh, and yelled out Piggy! Piggy! I told him to stop and not to tell anyone. He stopped and it became silent.
We start to wonder after a while what ever happened to the other boys after the evacuation plane crash. I say that the plane must have crashed from being shot at so there must be a lot of other boys around on this island, so we wanted to find away to see. I looked around and saw a big creme colored shell in the ground. Ralph picks it up. It's a conch I say, we can use to call for the other boys. I told Ralph how to blow it. I told him my friend use to have one and he blew in it like spit kind of blow. Ralph tries and tries, and finally blows out a deep sound that echos through out the island jungle. Birds fly out of the trees from everywhere as the voice of the conch shell echoes. Ralph blows again and little boys start to appear out from the jungle.
The first to appear at the oldest was around twelve, and the others around six and five. I start to take names. As I am taking names from the children, A group of older boys dressed in black gowns walked down the beach in parallel line with one of the motif older boy stood out in the front looked like the leader. I turn tow colored,and I don't ask for the older boys name. The boys name is Jack he starts to taunt me with a nickname by calling me "fatty". Then Ralph yells out that my name it isn't "fatty", but is Piggy. All the boys start to snigger at me, and I can feel a suffusion of red on my face from the embarrassment. I thought I could trust Ralph, but I guess I was wrong.
After the embarrassing moment they started too choose a leader for all the groups of boys. Jacks choir votes for him, but all the other boys vote for Ralph. Ralph wins, though Jack wants the position. Now that they have picked a leader it is time for him and two others to explore the environment. I proffered to go with them, and whined to but, instead he calls up Jack and one of his choir boy. The three boys leave the beach to go explore the new land, while Piggy is stuck with the little ones. While he is watching them kids he decides to take more names, until the three boys come back.
TKAM Journal 9: Jems POV
16 years ago
11 comments:
Hola
I love your blog design. Its really cool.
blog #1
it was great in discripton but i think that you could have started with putting the character some where and saying what the place looked like. other thatn that i think that you did great.
woa, how did you make your blog like that, really cool
Thankz guys for the lovely comments, I have been waiting for comments for a long time. Ever since we started the project
the following has the comments for blogs 1 to 5
Blog 1
You did a great job putting yourself into Piggy’s eyes but you should start with a description of the place they are especially when the reader has never been there before. Other than that you did great especially with using the vocabulary words.
Blog 2
Amazing how you used Simon’s point of view! I loved it although I don’t think “murmur” was a vocabulary word. Other wise it was good. I love your titles! And the whole way that it was written in character as if it was happening right now, no now! I loved how you ended it with this: The little boy in the forest all alone, with the fire loose. I stand there with the fires light and smoke burning my eyes. Fantastic!
Blog 3
It was really good but when you use dialogue remember to skip a line like:
Bob said “hi”
“Hey,” said Paul “how are you?”
Get it when s new person talks you skip.
Blog 4
I loved it and I liked how you used description fist in this. “It is a silent night, the trees sway in the wind, and the fire moves from the winds push. Everyone sits along the fire and we eat the dinner.” Almost like poetry I can’t to read your next but keep up the good work.
Blog 5
Ha, it was so cool how you put Piggy in the beginning when there was only Ralph. And I like the creativity in the part where you use Piggy when the others left. There was some great stuff like this: “I turn my back to go back to the huts to sleep some more. I turn a whole hundred and thirty degrees around and AHHH! "You littluns scared me, I thought you were sleeping." They started to giggle and were off playing.” That was amazing and it was if you were right there documenting everything.
it was really nice. i enjoyed reading it. and i loved the back ground art. the only thing i would tell u is to work on ur grammer.
I liked how you described what she was feeling and how she got the diary in the first place.
-Zoe
I like the way that the writer changed the diary to a reading book. This sounds like the perfect book for any one who wants to like books that concern people that are willing to read a book with the Holocaust.
from Zack
Comment on Book review:
I think that you did a great job of explaining the plot, and the many characters. I also think that the way you said how Anne truly poured her heart into her book, Kitty was a great way of saying that.
-Rachel
Comment for your book review:
I like how you gave a summary of the book. You didn't give away the ending even though most already know it. I also like how your last sentence wasn't "But to find out, your going to have to read the book."
-Ben H
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